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first song
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#1
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I recorded/mixed my very first original song. Let me know what you guys think, all criticism is welcome.

https://soundcloud.com/matt-gibson-6/freedom

I recorded/mixed my very first original song. Let me know what you guys think, all criticism is welcome.

https://soundcloud.com/matt-gibson-6/freedom
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#2
0 Frags +

Got a bit drawn out around the middle, but other than that I like it a lot.

Got a bit drawn out around the middle, but other than that I like it a lot.
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#3
0 Frags +

I felt like some times the main melody didnt sync up with the singing, it seemed like a note was missing or cut off, but that is my personal thought.

You have a great voice, the whole song is amazing for your first original song.

I felt like some times the main melody didnt sync up with the singing, it seemed like a note was missing or cut off, but that is my personal thought.

You have a great voice, the whole song is amazing for your first original song.
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#4
0 Frags +

Quite nice. You have a pleasant voice, and solid composition skills. The middle section was cool, whole song in good taste & progresses well.

Quite nice. You have a pleasant voice, and solid composition skills. The middle section was cool, whole song in good taste & progresses well.
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#5
-3 Frags +

it feels like you are in falsetto or singing the same high note the whole time or something which was kind of annoying but the composition and the guitar and everything was pretty great.

it feels like you are in falsetto or singing the same high note the whole time or something which was kind of annoying but the composition and the guitar and everything was pretty great.
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#6
5 Frags +

YOU HAVE FUTURE
i enjoyed it

YOU HAVE FUTURE
i enjoyed it
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#7
0 Frags +

not sure what you mean #5 because that is not my falsetto :/

not sure what you mean #5 because that is not my falsetto :/
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#8
2 Frags +

I really like the guitar parts but I feel like you should be a little more assertive with your voice.

I really like the guitar parts but I feel like you should be a little more assertive with your voice.
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#9
0 Frags +

i thought that it was amazing, no complaints. great for surfing :) i liked the piano parts a lot

i thought that it was amazing, no complaints. great for surfing :) i liked the piano parts a lot
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#10
0 Frags +

pretty awesome

pretty awesome
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#11
0 Frags +

A few parts in the beginning felt like they didn't sync up well and it bothered me a lot, mainly because everything else about the song (the mood, the progressions/ arpeggios, your voice <3) were utterly fantastic. I'd pick bass back up immediately if it meant I'd be able to play with you.

A few parts in the beginning felt like they didn't sync up well and it bothered me a lot, mainly because everything else about the song (the mood, the progressions/ arpeggios, your voice <3) were utterly fantastic. I'd pick bass back up immediately if it meant I'd be able to play with you.
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#12
6 Frags +

hey #10 who the fuck are you

hey #10 who the fuck are you
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#13
3 Frags +
beefhey #10 who the fuck are you

Lets not get any beef between you guys.

[quote=beef]hey #10 who the fuck are you[/quote]
Lets not get any beef between you guys.
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#14
1 Frags +
aimbeefhey #10 who the fuck are youLets not get any beef between you guys.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2uQ76qrlK78

very awesome song by the way can you put it up on youtube by any chance?

[quote=aim][quote=beef]hey #10 who the fuck are you[/quote]
Lets not get any beef between you guys.[/quote]

[youtube]http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2uQ76qrlK78[/youtube]

very awesome song by the way can you put it up on youtube by any chance?
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#15
0 Frags +

...this is beautiful. I kind of like the restrained quality of the vocals.

This isn't a superhit, but more like a song you'd put on while cooling out with some friends.

...this is beautiful. I kind of like the restrained quality of the vocals.

This isn't a superhit, but more like a song you'd put on while cooling out with some friends.
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#16
0 Frags +

I love your voice so much

I love your voice so much
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#17
-3 Frags +

http://teamfortress.tv/forum/thread/4104-prepare-yourselves

http://teamfortress.tv/forum/thread/4104-prepare-yourselves
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#18
1 Frags +

You have a nice voice and I really liked the guitar composition. The only thing I didn't like was the guitar panned hard right starting around 3:00. It took all my focus away from the rest of the song and felt unbalanced.

You're great though. Keep it up.

You have a nice voice and I really liked the guitar composition. The only thing I didn't like was the guitar panned hard right starting around 3:00. It took all my focus away from the rest of the song and felt unbalanced.

You're great though. Keep it up.
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#19
0 Frags +

I felt like there were basically no changes in dynamics/structure for the first 2:30 in spite of the piano, and other guitar track being introduced, making it feel a bit wooden. Part of this comes from a lack of verse chorus verse structure, but that's all good so long as I still feel like I'm going somewhere. I'd like to hear some more variation and ideas in the 'rhythm' guitar, because you can obviously play. Perhaps a little more thought to the melody as well, as some parts seemed off.

Honestly pretty durn good for a first kick at it, and well done!

KEEP AT IT!!!

I felt like there were basically no changes in dynamics/structure for the first 2:30 in spite of the piano, and other guitar track being introduced, making it feel a bit wooden. Part of this comes from a lack of verse chorus verse structure, but that's all good so long as I still feel like I'm going somewhere. I'd like to hear some more variation and ideas in the 'rhythm' guitar, because you can obviously play. Perhaps a little more thought to the melody as well, as some parts seemed off.

Honestly pretty durn good for a first kick at it, and well done!

KEEP AT IT!!!
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#20
0 Frags +

I wasn't expecting something so good for your first song. I noticed what others said about the beginning not syncing up nicely or something of that nature, but it was quite nice to listen to.

Keep going!

I wasn't expecting something so good for your first song. I noticed what others said about the beginning not syncing up nicely or something of that nature, but it was quite nice to listen to.

Keep going!
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#21
1 Frags +

your guitar playing is good

work on being less of a faggot tho

your guitar playing is good

work on being less of a faggot tho
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#22
0 Frags +

ginger

ginger
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